Email Revision

Email Revision
Student’s Name
Professor’s name
Course
Date
Scenario 1 – Susan’s Email
Dear Professor,
Greetings, I understand that you are busy so I will be brief. I wish to express my sincerest gratitude for being of great assistance in my studies recently. I have strived to put in place all that you stressed during lectures and apply the same when writing my essays. However, my grades have not been appealing, and I am writing to make a humble request which I promise will reflect in my class grades. Upon receiving the results of my essay, I noted that I did not perform as I had anticipated. My presumption that I had already read and revised enough is the primary cause of my failure. I must admit that I may have made mistakes when writing my essay and this is why I am seeking your intervention and assistance so that I can better my grades.
Recently, I have devoted much time in the library researching and studying on how to better my essay writing skills. I also made an initiative of writing a couple of essays to gauge my competency. Additionally, I spent hours searching for credible sources to support my ideas and assertions. However, little did I know that I was yet to master the art of writing excellent essays. I also understand that you are very strict on essay writing and I appreciate this because it is for the greater good of all students. However, I was hopeful that you would enlighten me by pointing out specific areas that I am yet to master. I promise to devote my time and effort to focus on what you will emphasize.

I yearn to become one of the best students in your class, and all I am asking for is your assistance. I will be hoping to hear from you soon regarding this issue and thanks a lot for devoting your time to read my email.
Regards,
Susan.
Scenario 2 – Don’s Email
Dear Professor,
Hello, I hope you are having an excellent week. Lately, you have devoted much of your effort to teach us on how to write excellent essays, and this is quite commendable. Despite my zeal to follow your guidelines, my grades are deteriorating. I believe that there is something that I am missing out and I hope that you will help me improve my grades. I have always had the zeal to pass in this class because this course is crucial in what I am looking forward to venturing into in my career life. Since the start of the semester, I have always tried to remain attentive in class, but in the long run, my efforts are not bearing any fruits. I wish to admit that my approach to study may be different from that of other students but I am ready to change because I want to pass.
As from next week, I am hoping to meet you for a few minutes after class so that you can guide me on where I may have missed the point and what I can do to improve my grades. I am ready to make sacrifices even if this requires me to write an essay every week. I believe your intervention in this issue will be crucial towards my improvement in performance not only in this class but also in other courses. Nevertheless, I understand that you have a very tight schedule which is not easy to adjust. However, I will be forever indebted to you if you set some of your time to guide me on how to better my grades. Thanks in advance professor as I look forward to receiving a positive response from you.
Regards,
Don.