Bioscience Student Responses 3

Bioscience – Student Responses 3
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Bioscience – Student Responses 3
Lorien
The first paragraph is well structured. You have appropriately mentioned the two conditions that make them better than other species. The examples you have given correctly describe the difference between humans and other species. The concluding part of the paragraph fully supports your first sentence. In the second paragraph, yes it is our mind that will think of others and therefore allows associating with them. You have also mentioned the word fiction and illustrated it, and the people responsible for creating it are humans only (Dennis, Auerbach, Balshaw, Cui, Fallin, Smith, Miller, 2016). In the last paragraph, you have portrayed your imagination in a good way. This means that you understand the topic in that from what someone is teaching you can withdraw your imagination. It’s true that money controls the world and humans depend on it to survive while other species only depend on survival because if you cannot hunt, then you will be hunted, this statement is adequately elaborated. It was very wise of you even to learn some new biological words. I support the recommendation; students will also understand what brings the difference between humans and other species.
Daniel
Daniel, biology requires answering the question directly without creating a lot of theories, and I can see from your work you have strictly observed the rule. Thanks for the critical organization of your assignment; this makes the work simple to understand.

For the last question you should give your opinion basing on the understanding of the reading, please answer the question (Spencer, Price & Leith, 1995). You should provide a view, at least apply the knowledge you have acquired to come with a critical understanding of the text. The two conditions you have mentioned only the first one is correctly explained, imagination and humans’ belief in fiction come due to their communicating ability. Have also realized some spelling mistakes like planet you have written plate. Certain sentences are not consistent. Your sentences are too long and not correctly punctuated. You have a suitable method of answering questions; by writing a question and explaining it gives me easy time not to think much. Please work on your punctuation so that your sentences do not lose meaning. You should have expanded your explanation on how collaboration gives rise to humans to provide us with a better understanding.
Cole
Cole thanks for the job, unfortunately, I am not sure which question you are answering, and I have to strain through the paragraphs. There were three questions but your paragraphs are four, so I don’t understand the mode of answering that you are using. It is imperative that you should mention the question you intend to answer so that your work is well organized and getting the points is more comfortable. You have mentioned the two conditions that allow humans to have control over the planet as a corporation and the intimate knowledge (United Nations Development Program, 2012). You have only expounded on the corporation in the entire paragraph, but no explanation is provided for the second condition. You have correctly mentioned the factors that allow the humans to collaborate but they are hidden within the paragraphs. The topic sentence should be the first sentence to introduce the paragraph so that someone is aware of what you intend to discuss in the paragraph. Asking a question while at the same time you were asked a question makes the assignment complicated, please remove the question paragraph and give explanatory statements. Finally, your perception of the rise of humans should be biological, not biblical.

References
Dennis, K. K., Auerbach, S. S., Balshaw, D. M., Cui, Y., Fallin, M. D., Smith, M. T., … Miller, G. W. (2016). The Importance of the Biological Impact of Exposure to the Concept of the Exposome. Environmental Health Perspectives, 124(10), 1504–1510. https://doi.org/10.1289/EHP140
Spencer, J. H., Price, R. A., & Leith, J. A. (1995). Planet Earth : Problems and Prospects. Montreal [Que.]: MQUP. Retrieved from http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=nlebk&AN=404730&site=ehost-live
United Nations Development Programme. (2012). One Planet to Share : Sustaining Human Progress in a Changing Climate. London: United Nations Publications. Retrieved from http://search.ebscohost.com/login.aspx?direct=true&db=nlebk&AN=464945&site=ehost-live